I am a junior high school student, this is an English composition of my monthly exam, only nine points, please any expert to help me modify!

.......... First of all, I must say that your essay is too much "Chinese English" .....

Now Yi Chang is called "China polite city" everyone was excited The sentence is "Yichang was named China's civilized city, which made everyone very happy." What about the conjunction? Now Yi Chang is called 'National Civilized City' so that everyone is excited." The tense should be the same! Why does the present tense change to the past tense?

,You should do something .and more,the are very important for everyone." You should do something because being civilized is important to everyone.

First ,civilized traffic ,you should be 'red light stop This sentence really can't be said that way ....... You should do something because being civilized is important to everyone.

First ,civilized traffic ,you should be 'red light stop This sentence really can't be said like this. Remember, when you say "first, second, third", restart the sentence and capitalize it.

The rest of the revision of their own, grammar foundation is weak, read the book to strengthen yo!