The third grade composition "Lantern Festival" teacher corrects comments

Night fell quietly, the sunset glow put away the gorgeous silk, and the sun came down from the treetops reluctantly. The surrounding air seems to be frozen, and occasionally a few birds are singing.

Unconsciously, half a moon climbed the treetops, hey! Round after round, the moon slowly changed from semicircle to ellipse, and from ellipse to full moon. What a strange and moving scene! The moon has climbed to the top of the cloud. It is as clear as a lake, as spotless as a mirror, as bright as a shadow and as radiant as a silver plate.

After dinner, through the screen window, I saw that the bright moon was entangled in a faint cloud, like a girl's white gauze hat, and then came out of the cloud, brighter and rounder. The night sky is like ink, without a trace of noise. Suddenly, a burst of firecrackers broke the silence of the night. Then, it was surrounded by firecrackers. In the sky, fireworks are like huge flowers, very beautiful. Occasionally, several lanterns flying in the sky make the moon more charming. Soft moonlight fills every corner. Looking up, the moon is like a moon cake, and everyone looks greedy. Taking advantage of the moonlight, this feeling is deeply embedded in the article. ...

Teacher's comments

Starting with the change of the shape of the moon in the Lantern Festival, this paper describes the beauty of the moon with outstanding emphasis and appropriate details. The full text uses metaphor, personification and other means to write the moonlight and fireworks on the Lantern Festival night, expressing the little author's love for the Lantern Festival and enhancing the momentum and appeal of the article.