Write the scene and evaluate the composition.

Write a scene composition evaluation 1 1. The young author goes out of the classroom to pay attention to life and writes his feelings in traditional festivals from a unique perspective. Its language is fresh, lively and smooth, and the action description and character dialogue of Bao Zongzi are even more childlike. After reading the whole article, the image of a lovely child jumps from the paper.

2. This is a story. The author tells the story of making zongzi. At the beginning of the article, "Bao Zongzi" is directly pointed out, which leads to the following narrative. The author described the process of making zongzi in detail. The author also quoted Du Fu's poems, adding literary grace to the article.

3. This is a descriptive article. After reading your article, the teacher was particularly moved, moved by dad's memory of grandma and moved by your understanding. Between the lines of the article, I miss my grandmother. The full-text language is fluent, natural and vivid, which is a good exercise.

This is a narrative. The author adopts the method of combining narrative and lyric to express his admiration and admiration for the heroes of the revolutionary predecessors. The language of the article is cordial and natural, and every sentence is full of the author's memory of the protagonist.

This article describes the beautiful scene of meeting the bamboo forest for the first time. The content of the article is substantial, the language is concise and concise, and the scenery description is particularly delicate, which outlines a beautiful bamboo forest. The description of bamboo sound at the end of the article takes the article to another profound realm. "That melodious and profound voice runs through my whole childhood and my whole life." Arouse readers' thinking about life.

The author of this article introduced the origin of this name to us in simple language. The article has a complete structure, distinct levels, fluent language and comprehensive narration. After reading it, people feel that the little author must be a child who loves reading and has a wide range of knowledge.

7. These exercises didn't pay attention to the refinement of language. For example, in the sentence "Today is August 15, which is a tradition, and mom got up early today", "Today" appears twice, and the second "Today" can be omitted. The article also does not pay attention to the correct use of punctuation, such as using quotation marks for everything.

8. This article is beautiful in language and easy to understand. It quoted many poems describing the moon in the Mid-Autumn Festival, expressing the author's thoughts for his family. This article is both ideological and artistic, and it makes people think deeply after reading it. This is good exercise.

9. This is a lyric prose. The author likes her sister's Tanabata articles to feel her life and thoughts. The article asked many questions and directly expressed the theme of "I like it". The language of the article is poetic, eloquent and infectious. Among them, "Zhang Wen" should be "article".

10, this is a narrative. With the help of his father's mouth, the author introduced us to the origin and the author's determination to be a patriotic person like Qu Yuan.

1 1, with clear context, strong sense of hierarchy and orderly narrative.

12, with proper details, clear priorities and clear thinking. Carefully selected, the material seems to be tailor-made for the theme.

13, the narrative is detailed and concrete, the details are vivid and vivid, the characters are vivid and prominent, and the images are full and vivid.

14, setting off the characters' emotions with the environment, blending scenes, feelings in the scene, and scenes in the scene.

15, rich in imagination, strange in conception and not divorced from the truth of life, binds the association of life, broadens the reader's thinking and makes people feel lively and interesting.

16, the scenery description is vivid, the words and sentences are appropriate, and the scenes are in harmony with each other, just like a vivid sketch painting presented to the readers.

17. Fantasy imagination comes from life and is higher than life, which broadens readers' horizons and is full of artistic charm.

18. The description of the event process is detailed and specific. Although there are many contents, it seems to be orderly, which reflects the author's clear thinking and planning ability for the layout of the article.

19, vivid appearance, lifelike characters, decent clothes, like a mirror reflecting the character, really called "life depends on each other."

20. The description of the environment is objective and true, and the environment serves the characters, which better explains the ins and outs of the formation of the characters' personalities.

Write a scene composition evaluation 2 1, the plot is straightforward, there is no suspense, and it seems to be a running account.

The process is very detailed, but the ending is short and incomplete. The structure is unreasonable, giving people the feeling of anticlimactic.

3. The concept is unreasonable and the content is full of loopholes, which cannot reflect the truth of life.

4. The plot is ups and downs, and the conversion is too fast and not coherent enough.

5. Rhetoric metaphor is vivid and appropriate, and ontology is similar to metaphor, which greatly enhances the interest and persuasiveness of the article.

6. Properly use the method of comparison and comparison to prove the center of the article through the disparity and difference between things.

7. Lose no time to use parallelism to explain the characteristics of things in many ways, which not only enhances the language potential, but also leaves a very deep impression on readers.

8. Using personification skillfully, the images in the text have the characteristics of human behavior, human thoughts and feelings, and reflect the spiritual course of the protagonist in the text from the side.

9, material selection can choose the typical theme of life, the event is more representative.

10, the material selection is novel and unique, not mediocre, and it is refreshing.

Write the scene composition evaluation 3 1, express vividly, outline the character characteristics in a few words, and the characters' manners have distinct and unique personalities.

2. Before and after the content, the content is not closely related, and some content is too isolated and not closely related to the main body of the article.

3. The narrative is short and rough, with only a frame structure, and the characters lack distinctive personality characteristics.

4. Inappropriate details and unclear priorities.

5. The content is mostly outlined by lines, lacking detailed description based on points.

6, inconsistent with the atmosphere of the times, the content is too old and aging.

7. The theme is prominent, the center is clear and the thinking is clear.

8. Clear views, clear likes and dislikes, make people clear at a glance.

9. The theme is directly prominent in content, clear and to the point, and there is no redundancy.

10, with serious subject matter, noble thoughts and strong enterprising spirit.

1 1, the center is not clear enough and the concept is not clear enough.

12, the theme is vague, the meaning is vague, and the writing purpose is unclear.

13, although there is a central theme, the expression is not strong enough and the words are not true.

14, the expression is not clear and the persuasiveness is not strong.

15, the theme is not serious enough, and there are still dross in thought.

16, the plot is tortuous, and the narrative process has a certain sense of ups and downs, which reflects the curve beauty of the plot and is fascinating.

17, the plot is strong in faltering, and accidents happen at ordinary times, which can attract readers' attention.

18, the plot changes irregularly, with occasional suspense and waves, which is unexpected. The development process of the event embodies the author's innovative ideas.

19, the plot develops smoothly and lacks certain ups and downs.

20. The plot changes are unremarkable and lack new ideas.