4 beautiful essays and reviews

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My old table lamp is not really old, it is only four years old. But it is, if calculated according to the age of people, old enough. The contrast with the person reflects the history of the old table lamp.

He has a blue head, a long gray neck, and a blue and white base with a long black tail trailing behind it.

The old desk lamp, was a good friend. Every night, when my mother writes papers and prepares lessons; when I have to finish the homework assigned by the teacher, the old desk lamp is silently accompanying us, emitting a soft light. The old lamp witnessed the joy of our success and experienced the pain of our failure.

The old lamp is also a "vitality" lamp.

It's base - a blue and white "ellipsoid". Last time I accidentally dropped it to the ground, so the "ellipsoid" on my fall opened a hole. I thought it was useless, but when I was doing my homework at night, I pressed the switch, and it still emitted white light.

It's a lamp that has been replaced by two. I accidentally broke one last time, and the second one "burned out" after a few months. The third one has lasted until now.

Mom originally wanted to change a table lamp, but, always have no time to change, also can not change, because, the old table lamp has accompanied us through four years of night.

The old lamp, no big red and purple "coat", but there is a simple and simple heart.

I like the old lamp, and I like it even more for its unassuming heart!

Overall comments

The author describes in simple terms the lamp that has been used for a long time at home, and focuses on the "vitality" of the lamp, reflecting the lamp's simplicity and simplicity. However, the description should pay attention to the appropriate details to highlight the theme.

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2. Lantern Festival on the 15th day of the first month

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Today is the Lantern Festival on the 15th day of the first month, and we all know that we have to enjoy the lanterns, guessing the lanterns, and eating the lanterns. In our Langxi County there is another custom - watching fireworks. Describe the background of social life and highlight the scene described.

In the evening, my whole family went to my great-grandmother's house to watch the fireworks. My great-grandmother's house lives in the Zhonggang neighborhood, across the street from the stadium, which is the best viewing point. The road was bustling with people, and everyone rushed to the stadium. The explanation of the characters, the setting, and the related environment is clear and concise.

We just boarded the platform fireworks party began. Look, the little fireworks over there opened up in the low air, competing for color. Red, green, orange, yellow .... Look at the people's eyes blossom prairie. Observe the fireworks from afar and write a little about them.

Wow, look over there, that kind of fireworks is really beautiful ah! From a distance, it is like a mythical story of the Seven Fairies, red, orange, yellow, green, green, blue, purple, meteor-like skimming the sky; and like a dancer, her dance moves gracefully, for a moment, turning her colorful dance skirts, a moment in order to jump up to the passionate Mongolian dance, her long sleeves swinging back and forth, cuffs fluttering; and like the trees in the forest, which is a newly planted, shorter, the one that is 100 years old, taller, and the one that is 100 years old, taller, and the one that is 100 years old, taller. That tree is a hundred years old, taller, high and low, uneven. The center paragraph, the use of rhetoric, subtle similes, gorgeous prose, set off a gorgeous scene.

This paragraph, dominated by an imagined static scene.

"Hoo, boom" is beautiful! It's huge! There was another "boom" and I looked up into the sky and there was a huge orange cosmos blooming in the night sky. This "daisy" lit up the whole sky. "Bar" sound, the sky appeared a colorful "stars", flashing one by one, it is difficult to distinguish between the real and the fake. It is more in favor of dynamic real writing.

Fifteen Lantern Lanterns, see fireworks has become a bright landscape of our Langxi people on the 15th of January, fifteen moon garden, fifteen fireworks beauty, fifteen hometown more lively. The mood is generated by the scene, real and moving, unlimited feelings of the countryside, contained therein.

Overall comments

Gorgeous and subtle this move, detailed and appropriate narrative, static and distant multi-level description, for us to show the fireworks of the night sky.

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Intentions: Lantern Festival, open lights and fireworks, a peaceful scene. Instant stream cascade down, at that time and that moment what you see and hear, it is how exciting things ah. With a sunny mind, to face the things around, things, people, the harvest will be amazing.

Selection: Lantern Festival, celebrate the style, wherever possible. But the students have a unique eye, seize the most expressive "fireworks" to show, focusing on ink, targeted.

Levels: properly detailed, well organized. Fireworks before the elements of the account, concise and clear. And then, from far to near, from point to point, from static to dynamic, multi-level, all-round description of the dazzling visual impact of fireworks. The ending is lyrical, far-reaching and breathtaking.

Text: two, three paragraphs, the most prominent. The second paragraph, rather imposing prose, supplemented by a novel and unique metaphor, gorgeous words, outlining the colorful night sky, to virtual writing; the third paragraph, depicting the changes in the fireworks, real writing mostly.

Throughout the text, the detailed and appropriate arrangement of the material, the subtle application of analogies and metaphors, the movement of the full range of near and far depicted the night of the brilliant stars, reflecting in front of you and me. The atmosphere of joy, lingering around, then the mood, flowing between the paper, how many happy smiling faces, how many happy times, let us stay in love.

3. I want to be a boy

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Growing up, mom and dad have always favored my brother, and ignored me as a quiet and understanding child. At that time, I wanted to be a boy. The word "boy" has been changed to "girl" to make the contrast with the title more obvious.

Mom and Dad took us to the bookstore, and my brother and I both fell in love with <<Love Education>>, although the price is a little expensive, but the content is colorful. Mom said to me with a sad face: "Ying, don't buy it, it's a waste of money."'' Then my father said to my brother with a smile: ''You buy it! Enjoy it!'' When my brother heard that, he said with a smile on his face: ''Dad, thank you! I can only be on the sidelines of tears. At that moment, I wanted to be a boy. The harsh reality, of course, is that these are not common for many children.

On one occasion, we had guests at our house. Mom said to the guests with great care: ''My son is very understanding, excellent academic results ...... The guests praised my brother. I couldn't wait to get to the bottom of it. At that moment, I wanted to be a boy even more. The description in this paragraph is not as clear as in the previous one because there is no comparison. You praised your brother's performance, but what about your grades? You should have said something about that.

How I wanted to be a boy! Speak from the heart, but can you tell us what you're going to do?

Overall Comments

The innocent and tender words make us really feel that the confusion and helplessness from the child's heart.

Theme: Why is there such confusion in the age of one child? A sigh of relief, let us *** together to witness that child's bitter inner world.

Selection: choose two things, describing how parents prefer sons to daughters. But, the persuasive force is not enough, the cause and effect of the padding, is still lacking. Especially the second thing, a lot of circumstances are not explained clearly.

Levels: the attitude, followed by the description of the current situation, and finally expressed feelings. Simple content, more clearly organized.

Writing: the language is relatively young, and the demeanor, actions, and psychological descriptions of the two events are rather bland. As the beginning stage, still need to work hard to learn ah. Throughout the text, the author introduces us to a status quo, savor the helplessness within. Of course, due to the age of the young, the level of limitations, still need more refinement. For the description of the selected examples, you can learn from other excellent works, so as to improve in time. Everything is difficult at the beginning, work hard.

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4. Teachers who think less for themselves and more for others

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The teacher is like a star on the sky, his light is always so small, and the moon is always so bright, that's because The moon's light is offered by the stars! The light of the moon is shone by the sun.

On the night of New Year's Eve, my mom was in the kitchen making delicious food. Dinner was served! Wow!!! It's so rich!!!

I rushed to start my chopsticks, and when I was about to eat, I suddenly remembered that I had said I would call my teacher to say "Happy New Year". I put down my chopsticks because I knew that my teacher was still in the bookstore looking for teaching materials for the next semester's classes! I picked up the phone and called my teacher. I couldn't wait to say, "Happy New Year, teacher!" I didn't realize that it wasn't the teacher who answered the phone, but the bookstore administrator, who said that the teacher had forgotten his cell phone while he was reading! I put down the phone, then a phone rang, it was the teacher, he said, "Happy New Year!" I suddenly had words in my heart that I couldn't say, he thought of giving us a New Year's greeting at this time, while he himself was still silently looking for materials for us in each class, I also said, "Happy New Year!!!" The teacher said he was busy and hung up. Didn't you tell him about losing his cell phone at the bookstore?

Should be "preparing for class"

You say, there are just a few teachers like this in the world, people who think more about others and less about themselves ah ！！！！！！

Overall comments

Seemingly ordinary small things, but reveals the teacher caring for the students of the noble teacher moral. A brief New Year's greeting makes one feel the sweet fragrance of the teacher's spring rain moisturizing everything, and moreover, it presents the teacher's equality and cordiality with the students in a natural way. In the development of writing teachers to their own blessings, you can write more about their inner feelings, but also can be appropriate to describe the festive atmosphere of the day, in the future composition, but also please pay attention to the author try not to arbitrarily use punctuation.

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5. Happy times

The class is over, the students heard the bell ring, like a steed in the grasslands rushed out of the classroom. The campus was immediately bustling with activity. A "rush" word, point out the students can not wait mood.

On the playground, some students played games, some jumped rope, some played basketball, and some played yo-yo. I, however, was playing shuttlecock with my good friend Xiaohong. Red kicked the shuttlecock forward and backward. The shuttlecock flew up and down like a happy little butterfly, which was very beautiful. She kicked the shuttlecock while I counted it. Before I knew it, she had kicked the shuttlecock more than 100 times. Her classmates watched her with astonishment.

It was my turn to kick, but I could only kick forward, not backward. Although I can only kick forward, I kick very fast. Red was already too tired to count. She said, "Slow down, slow down, I can't count how fast you are." The shuttlecock was swinging in the wind like a blooming lily on my foot.

After finishing the shuttlecock, during the break, I suddenly saw a little classmate jumping rope. She jumped many kinds of tricks. There were twisted ropes, one-legged jumps, and double-legged jumps, which were very beautiful! I saw the rope gently sliding past her feet and heard a "swish" sound. Her toes were gently pointing on the ground, like a happy bird falling down and flying up at the same time. It was very light! Two pigtails fluttered up and down like a pair of bees.

Students, this is a happy time. Let's remember this wonderful time!

Overall Comments

Between classes is the most noisy time in the campus, and it is also the most desirable time for students. Without the worries of homework and the constraints of the classroom, every student enjoys the fun of childhood. The author describes in turn the scene of students playing shuttlecock, jumping rope, full of rich campus atmosphere, pleasure and joy overflowing.

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6. Meaningful Spring Festival

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In previous years, most of the time of the Spring Festival was covered by eating and firecrackers, which was happy but meaningless. In this year's Spring Festival, I was lucky enough to witness a wonderful tug-of-war match, which added to the hilarity of the Spring Festival. At that time, when I heard, I had a feeling of "having a good show to watch", and my heart was filled with joy. I put my handbag at home, then ran to the village committee to check the details, it turned out to be our village and several other villages to hold a tug-of-war, each village men and women six, the game time is scheduled for 3:00 p.m., the winning party also has a prize pay it. "It's really interesting," I somehow said to the bulletin board. Adding "contest" made it flow better.

"Check out the details" is a bit of an overstatement; it could be "find out what's going on".

After lunch, also almost three o'clock, I just walked out of the door to see, this situation, really a bit like the Japs into the city ah: the village head and the village secretary in front of the players, followed by the men and women of our village, the team is long and wide, look at the edge of the look, I heard that this is to go to the competition site, I joined the team, to the competition site, it is really as I expected - - a lot of people. -The crowd is huge. A hemp rope is placed firmly in the middle of the playground, beside the crowd. The comparison is not quite accurate.

"Cracking ~ Li ~ pop ~ la ~" firecrackers sounded, first of all, Hakurei slope (male) vs. the village of Xiaotun (male), that is, our village and Hakurei slope between the game, the team members have to enter, surrounded by spectators on both sides of the long necks, as if afraid to see their own members of the village, for the sake of convenience! The "attack and defense", the players are shoes to drag, some in order not to freeze still wearing socks it, they are all fists and palms, as if they want to eat each other, and then, the hand is tightly tugging on the rope, seems to want to take the rope for themselves.

"Doo," the whistle blew, and the players bowed their front feet and bent their back feet to their side, while the spectators stretched their necks and stared at the players. The cheerleaders in the field, rhythmically shouting "one, two, three", especially "three", shouting especially explosive, as if they are also in the tug of war like, at the same time, their hands have been to their own team to stir up, signaling towards that side of the pull. The team members teeth biting bloodless lips, as if they loose lips, the rope is going to be pulled away from the other side, especially our "pressure ambassadors" - the last one of the aunt, look at her squatting a "horse squat! Look at her squatting in a "dismounted squat", hand clutching the rope, brow tightly locked, lips a little purple, the cool winter wind blew, her disheveled hair slightly trembling. And our "pioneers" - more than 40 years old woman is not inferior, only to see her eyes locked tightly in the middle of the red rope, the whole body tilted backward, for fear that the red rope was "take" the past like.

"Doh", the end of the whistle sounded, the audience breathed a long sigh of relief, the players also into the tugging hand but did not let go, perhaps at this time their hearts are also tightly tugged it, only to hear the "yeah, we won" cheers, I would have expected I realized that our village had won, and my tense eyebrows were suddenly relieved. The next game we all gave it our all and finally won with the women's team in third place and the men's team in second place.

This year's Spring Festival was really meaningful, not only watched a wonderful game, but also from the game feel "unity is strength" the true meaning of the sentence. I believe that in 2008 I can also live a very meaningful, because a good start is half of the success.

Overall comments

The article vividly recounts the experience of watching a tug-of-war match during the New Year in the countryside, with a strong rural flavor and sincere and delicate emotions.

The author vividly depicts the players' eagerness to try and their incompetence in the tug-of-war from the angles of gestures and movements, which makes the reader feel the intensity of the competition and the strong flavor of the New Year in the countryside.

7. The power of love is infinite

-- Read "Love Education" feeling

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Today, I finished reading the world's most famous book -- "Love Education", benefited a lot ah! It should be changed to "benefited a lot"

The book tells many, many touching stories, so I won't talk about them one by one, but let's talk about the one that touched me the most! That one is "Shipwrecked", the general idea of the story is like this: a huge ship from the port of Liverpool, England, sailing to the island of Malta, in the third class cabin there is an Italian teenager, called Malia. Shortly after the ship sailed, an Italian sailor picked up a little girl and handed her over to Malia and left. Mario talked to the little girl for a while, and learned that she had gone to see her parents in Pestalozzi, and that her name was Colletta Faguni, and that she was a member of a group of Italian sailors. He also learned that her parents had sent her to her aunt's house, hoping that her aunt would have some inheritance when she died, but her aunt had nothing to show for it, so she was sent back. The little girl also learned that Mariah's parents had died. Just when they were chatting happily, the wind and waves suddenly big, see the ship is about to sink, the captain ordered the only remaining life sampan put into the water, transport some people to go, life sampan sit満人, can only sit a small child, the captain let the smaller Mariah go up, but Mariah said: "She is lighter than I, let her sit!" Then the little girl sitting in the boat to hold and throw into the sampan ...... The story is not concise enough.

This is a life-and-death situation, who can get on the sampan will have a chance to live, but why did the little boy Malia let the little girl go down? This is love, it is the power of love that makes Malia have the resignation to leave the chance of life to the little girl, regardless of his own life, this is self-sacrifice. I remember once, I and Xiaobing downstairs to play football, I accidentally kicked the neighbor's window glass broken, I also rely on the Xiaobing did, causing him to take a beating, now I think of it, I really feel sorry, and compared with the Mali'ah, I'm really ashamed of myself ah!

Read The Education of Love! It's a great read, and will definitely bring back memories!!!!

Overall comments

It can be seen that the author was y shocked and infected by "Education for Love", and therefore truly expressed his reverence for Mariar, with sincere emotions.

The article did not quote throughout, but chose the impressive fragment of the story, exuding the feeling of reading. It would have been a little more persuasive if it had been coupled with life examples.

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8. My Reading Life

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Gorky said, "Books are the ladder of human progress", and now, I understanding of this sentence is getting deeper and deeper. Quote introduction, penetration of the center, both to increase the persuasive power, but also makes people eager to do a look ahead from the meaning of the quote, the author's sense.

Every day, after doing homework, I have to turn over the extracurricular books, hungry to read every interesting story, feel every moving plot, appreciate every beautiful paragraph, and with the main character of the book with the same happiness and sadness, with the same breath **** fate. This not only let me learn a lot of knowledge, but also let me know a lot of truth. For example, reading the two stories "The Fox and the Crow" and "The Emperor's New Clothes" made me understand--don't listen to other people's flowery words, and use your brain to think about everything, or else the consequences will be unimaginable; The Little Girl Who Sells Matches let me know that there are still children in the world who suffer as she does, and it made me realize that I must treasure the The story of "The Little Carp Jumps the Dragon Gate" tells me that as long as I work hard towards my goal, I will definitely succeed. Books have really become my mentor and friend. The prose style, describing the mood, is concise and fluent.

"Not only", "and", the turn of the sentence, to carry on the next. Make the lines compact, echoing back and forth.

Three examples, all representative. But the space occupied by a little more, should be retained one, explain the intention can be.

Now, I am reading "100,000 Reasons", this book is really great, I have any questions I do not understand, as long as the book is opened to check, everything will be solved. Such as "Does the heart never rest?" "What is the limit of human life?" "Why do dragonflies need water?" "Why do the stars shine differently?" After reading this book, I am no longer confused about these questions. It makes me know a lot of scientific knowledge, and it leads me to explore more and more profound scientific mysteries!

The book is really my spiritual food! It makes my life colorful, makes my study full of sunshine, and makes my life more meaningful! I am enriched and growing up day by day in the fragrance of the ink! Detailed description of The Hundred Thousand Reasons, clear and smooth. The lyricism at the end is heartfelt and flows well.

The original draft, there is no fourth paragraph. But after the revision, separated out the fourth paragraph, is again on the review of the past feelings of lyricism, meaning deeper, should be separated from the previous text, highlighting the author's mood.

As a result, I also developed a good reading habit. After reading each article, I have to think: Is this article good? What is good about it? What is the beauty of it? What are the beautiful words and phrases, vivid descriptions? Unique writing style? And then excerpt them in the book, or write down their own reading experience, written into my reading journal. From the love of reading, to develop good reading habits. The feelings with the book, and sublimated to a new level.

Reading, let me mood happy! Reading, so that I have a broad vision! I love reading, I will always take the book as a friend, a lifetime with the book as a companion! Lyric emotion, naming the theme, emotionally sincere, out of the heart of people who love books.

Overall comments

Friends with books, full and warm, the student led every book lover, recalling the past bits and pieces between her and books.

Liberties: life is rich, the life of reading, and what will be the splendor of the unparalleled? The book lover you are, whether it is also déjà vu, or have experienced.

Selection: there is a book feeling of generalized talk, there are some of the books of the colorful, there are reading and cultivate good habits, the content is full and multi-level perspective. The beauty of it is that since it is life, it should be sour, sweet, bitter and spicy, the flavor of which is tasted alone. But the text, it seems only sweet, seems monotonous. Is it true that there are no other feelings when you are friends with books?

Levels: mainly out of the fourth paragraph, emotional expression, has been very enthusiastic, but the following peaks and turns, and is a narrative, the last lyric. This treatment, can be seen as ups and downs, but also easy to let people have choked to the feeling that the closing brush, the result is again spilling a lot of personal opinion, just for reference.

The text: fresh and clear, everywhere through the fragrance of books. Feelings are sincere and simple, the text is far away, through the heart clear and far away, the four seas to see the realization.

People who love to read, is happy, because without leaving home, will know the world, have a perfect friend. Today, we read from the text, sweet and cozy, but, as also the same way I seem to feel that the day with the book, there are a variety of tastes. Dear students, here looking forward to, your different reading life, different experience.