New to writing, how to write good dialog in a novel?

'Characterization before speaking'

To give you an example, the scene goes like this:

'The next day, my best friend and I went to the Public Security Bureau to see an old classmate and brought him lunch, and we also chatted and farted together'

To write the complete scene and tell the whole story, the most basic aspect of the white paper has to be written like this:

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The next day at noon, A and I walked into the public security office with a boxed lunch. Opening the door to B's room, we walked in

B saw us and said, "Yo, coming?"

A said, "Brought you lunch too."

B said: "I said the director of this character you have to change, from the time we went to school your face stinks to the present, I do not matter, you let our bureau of the police flower saw also thought you are my concubine."

A said angrily, "You are the concubine! What's this bullshit, how's the trial going with that Thai guy?"

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Has it ever felt like a feeling of a middle school student writing a novel? Look slightly awkward?

Actually, we can add some character movement and demeanor into it while the characters are talking

Let's revise the above:

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The next day at noon, A and I carried a boxed lunch and knocked on the door of B's office, where B was staring at the computer dealing with official business

"Yo, coming?"

"Brought you lunch too." A is not salty to dump a box to B

B is not surprised, while pulling the box of lunch said: "I say you have to change this character, from the time we went to school your face stinks to this day, I do not matter, you let our bureau of the police flower to see and think you are my concubine."

A froze, a slap on the table: "You only concubine! What's this bullshit, how's the trial going with that Thai guy?"

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Look, isn't it more comfortable?

In terms of dialog, leaving aside the sweeping demeanor and action, sometimes you can also describe from the side

Using action to describe the demeanor

Using demeanor to describe the character's inner activities

As I mentioned just now, "A froze, and slammed his hand on the table. The use of action to describe the demeanor

Imagine what a person who slaps the table after being momentarily confused would look like. Most of them are angry, or shocked

'Leave words on the table'

And in dialog, I have a habit of leaving words on the table

What is "leave words on the table"

What is "leave words on the table"? What is "leave words"?

It means that if the word "anger" is used above, it can't be used again, either sparingly or after a long paragraph

When you're reading a book, don't you occasionally get a funny feeling? I always feel like I've seen this somewhere before

So I glance up and see that the word was used only two hundred words ago

While it doesn't affect the story too much as a whole, it's still weird to read ......

It's still not right in the end

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'. "Change words" and "cut cleanly"

This works well, too. Take "anger" for example. ""、""roar"、"roar"、""death glare"，etc.

而 "Cutting cleanly" is the act of removing the words that indicate who is speaking when there are no more words available, and I personally recommend using it more often, as it echoes the "leaving words in" method mentioned above, and makes the text look cleaner

Example (before revision)

Example (before revision)

This is a good example. Before)

B cursed, "You're a real pain in my ass, how did I ever get to know you, you bogeyman."

I scolded back, "Cut the yapping, I can't believe your bureau hasn't been criticized."

He was absent: "Who knew this would happen, a few days ago it was just a coma, now it's good, directly to the West ......"

I said: "Eh B, how do you think A knew something would happen ?"

B said, "How do I know?"

I said, "Guess?"

B said, "Online gaming."

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Let's modify that. a little

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"You're a real pain in my ass," B scolded angrily, "How did I ever get to know a bogeyman like you."

"Less yakking, I can't believe your bureau hasn't been criticized." I do not hesitate to counterattack

He a moment absent, took out a cigarette to light: "Who knew this would happen, a few days ago it was just a coma, and now it's good, directly to the West ......"

"Eh B, how do you think A knew something would happen?"

"How was I supposed to know?"

"Guess?"

B thought about it, took a deep drag on his cigarette, and two words came out of his mouth, "Online gaming."

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Look, these ways of look much better when used down, don't they?