Comments on rewriting prose in classical Chinese

1. Final comment on senior high school ancient prose: "Your talent is extraordinary and you have made great achievements; Both talented and talented, attracting students to look up. However, I am sleepy all day and can't concentrate on my studies. The teacher knows this and is afraid that I will delay my studies and try my best to cure it. Diligence and idleness ruin success. May you wake up, cheer up, sleep in the lion, and dominate the quartet once! "

"May you wake up and cheer up."

"Thank you very much."

You are a talented woman, generous, wise, witty and intelligent. The beauty of the monarch lies in talent, virtue and the blooming of wisdom in the depths of the soul. The study of people's character is not innate, but acquired efforts. I hope you can learn your future talents with your own beauty and become an extraordinary yourself.

On the stage, impassioned, quite a general wind; In the classroom, eloquent, show the power of memory; During recess, I am naughty and lovely, and sometimes I have laughter. Occasionally, I have trouble chatting in class, so I can't be distracted. "Take one step, not ten; This is a great contribution to ten horses. "Learning is your specialty, and you need to persevere.

Ye Hao, a big math fan. He is generous, won the love of his classmates and was widely praised by his teachers. However, the liberal arts needs to be strengthened, and we must not favor one over the other. I look forward to finding the right strategy and making sad progress. The volume is too loud, which is really disturbing the people. Remember to control it.

Jade, as warm as fat, comes from stone, but it is precious to stone. The income of jade must be carefully studied and pondered, and thousands of years of hard work can become a tool. So is study! If you don't think independently and work hard, even if you have arrogant talent, it will be forever! If you can calm down and temper your mind, you can achieve great things.

The sea of knowledge, the mountain of learning, met Qing happily in the beautiful Woods. I feel diligent in my study, like natural intelligence, praise the Excellence of my study, and sigh the agility of my painting. Cherish inefficiency and worry about lack of sleep. Learning, meditation and concentration; Play, indulge, why not?

Gentle and refined, beautiful writing, so that students are full of praise. However, you are good at liberal arts and weak in math and science, and you are worried about your teacher. Fortunately, we have made every effort to make up for it recently and have made great improvements. Where there is a will, there is a way, and 120 customs will eventually lead to Chu: hard work pays off, and 3,000 Yue families can swallow Wu. I wish you more efforts, and I am most grateful at this time.

2. Revise the composition with comments. General comment: Your article is somewhat deliberate and unnatural. There are too many examples, but there is nothing concrete to restore your reading interest. Although there are examples, the article still looks a little pale and weak. At the end of each paragraph, the topic is well done, but it is a bit abrupt. It is best to have some finishing touches on the content, such as: looking through the classics, the book seems to emit a faint lavender fragrance, which is refreshing and leads me into the fairyland in that book. The style of this article has connotation, and there can be no lively words such as "100% handsome", which seems out of place with the article and destroys the feeling of the whole article.

Generally speaking, the article is well written and has a good idea. It just needs one or two examples to make the article more full and substantial, moderately delete some examples, and add some finishing touches to sublimate the theme. This is a good article that can get high marks.

3. How to rewrite ancient prose into prose? Understand the meaning first, translate it into vernacular Chinese, and then string together the beautiful words you can think of to write prose. First, the writing of prose is good at the idea of "everything is based on meaning".

The "meaning" of prose exists in the deep living soil and the vast ocean of life. To get it, we must rely on our in-depth observation, feeling and understanding of life.

Therefore, as long as prose is conceived from the reality of life, with distinct feelings, keen observation ability, the pulse of people's contemporaries, deep feelings, rich imagination and profound thinking, we will feel that our life is full of poetry. This poem is something that touches our hearts, makes our eyes suddenly enlightened, makes our thoughts suddenly sublimated, and makes our feelings more pure. This is the inspiration of the poem.

If we want to understand our article, we must understand it quickly. Because there is a tremor in the heart and a flash of thought.

Liu said: "Even a faint flash is better than no flash. This is no ordinary photography. This is literature. " For example, a writer went to see camellia. There are many kinds of them, and the beautiful camellia makes him feel: "Camellia is beautiful.

Everything good in life is created by labor. Who watered the flowers day and night with his own sweat, raised the seedlings like his own children, and finally cultivated such beautiful flowers? We should thank those who beautify our lives. "

This is the brilliance of thought, and the writer cherishes it very much, so he writes this meaning down in time. Later, he heard a gardener introduce a kind of camellia, and said, "This is called boy's noodle. It blooms late, just blooms, and its color is deep red, but it is the best. "

This didn't cause thinking, but he remembered the name of this camellia. After a while, it happened that a group of children also came to see Camellia, which attracted the writer's attention. He saw the children's bright red faces upturned, smiling sweetly and chattering nonstop. His heart suddenly trembled and he couldn't help but blurt out: "The boy's noodle tea is on."

The gardener realized this and said, "Really, there is no more beautiful camellia than this boy's face." This made an idea pop into his mind. He said, "I have an idea for a painting.

If you draw a blooming camellia with the thickest and brightest cinnabar, wouldn't it be a symbol of the face of the motherland? "So, the writer wrote the essay" Camellia Fu "with the feelings caused by watching Camellia. This writer is Yang Shuo.

Readers and critics can understand the author's intention of writing this article through reading: to praise the beautiful motherland and honor the working people of the motherland. Second, being good at conception is the process of processing and refining the living materials from coarse to fine, from virtual to real, from the outside to the inside.

The writer should seek the perfect artistic form for the ideological content of prose in his conception, so as to achieve the harmonious unity of ideological content and artistry. Therefore, conception should solve the problems of conception, material selection, artistic conception creation, genre determination, basic techniques and layout.

This paper focuses on three issues: determining genre, finding clues and creating artistic conception. First, determine the genre.

The genre of prose is flexible and diverse. We have a good meaning (thought) and have chosen the material to express this meaning (thought), so we have to consider: is it written in a letter or in a diary? Was it written as an essay or as an accidental feeling? Travel notes or memoirs? Should I write a preface or postscript, or a comment? The principle of determining specific genre is that content determines form, and form serves content.

For example, after traveling to Suzhou, if you feel the need to report your travels and impressions to your parents, you can write a letter; When you meet some people or things that move you during your play, you can write essays and ramble; After visiting Tiger Hill, Lion Forest, Hanshan Temple, Xiyuan and Liuyuan, you find the bells of Hanshan Temple particularly attractive and arouse your reverie, so you can write a lyric article as poetic as Lyric on the Country Altar. If you are revisiting the old place, eating some local products of Suzhou and recalling the past, you can write a reminiscence prose similar to Reminiscence of Millet ... In short, the form of expressing a specific genre should be determined according to the content of the intention. Second, look for clues.

The material of prose should be scattered, each material is a pearl, but there are internal relations between these pearls. We writers want to find a thread, use a pen as a needle, and put these scattered pearls into a dazzling bead necklace. So, what can be a clue? One is emotional clues.

When our feelings change in life, such as from disgust to like, or from like to disgust, we can use this emotional clue to connect some seemingly unrelated materials. For example, when Yang Shuo wrote "Litchi Honey", he used emotional clues to put childhood memories, convalescence in Conghua, litchi grove, Su Shi's poems, love to taste honey, visit bee farms, praise bees, farmers' labor and dream bees at night.

The second is the clue of things. For example, Cao Jinghua felt in his daily life that today we still need to carry forward the spirit of hard struggle of "millet with guns" in Yan 'an period, so he collected the past events about millet in his memory and used millet to combine events that happened in different places, different times and different situations.

Many essays that support objects and chant ambitions are also based on objects, such as Bing Xin's Ode to Cherry Blossoms. The third is the character clue.

If you write about a character's activities at different times and places, you can use this character as a clue, or you can use another character to connect things at different times, places, people and contents. This character can also be the writer himself-"I".

The fourth is the clue of thought. For example, in the face of something or a scene, I meditate and daydream, "I tend to travel in Wan Ren", "I look at the past and present in an instant, and I caress the whole world in an instant", "I cage heaven and earth in form and frustrate everything in writing".

Through association and imagination, related materials can be organized together to express the original theme. Such as Qin Mu's Land, Yang Shuo's Haicheng and Jia Pingwa's Chou Shi.

The fifth is the landscape clue. All landscape words are sentimental words.

Through the description of the scenery, the writer's thoughts and feelings are integrated into the scenery. For example.

4. The story of classical Chinese was rewritten as "Poet Fairy" and became famous in one fell swoop.

In the early days of Tianbao in the Tang Dynasty, Li Bai came to Chang 'an from Sichuan. Because no one recommended him, his brilliance has never been appreciated by the court.

One day, Li Bai heard that an important North Korean official wanted to come to the hotel for a drink. I think this will be a good opportunity for me to give my poem to him. So Li Bai came to this hotel early, waiting for He's arrival.

After a while, I saw He and some friends walking into the hotel talking and laughing. Li Bai found a table nearest to him and sat down. Li Bai poured himself a glass of wine, muttered something, and deliberately recited his proud poems from time to time.

When he heard someone chanting poems, Zhang Zhi turned to look at Li Bai. Seeing that Li Bai's demeanor was different, he got up and went over and asked, "Who wrote the good handwriting that Teacher Li recited just now?" Li Bai said, "This is my humble job." With that, he took the opportunity to take out a piece of paper from his pocket, on which was written the poem "Difficulties in Shu Dao".

He Zhangzhi took it, read it and said, "What a stroke of genius! You are simply a fairy from heaven to earth! " As soon as he was happy, he pulled Li Bai to the table and told the shopkeeper to add more wine and vegetables to drink with Li Bai. When he left to settle the bill with the shopkeeper, He Zhangzhi found that he didn't have enough money on him, so he took down the scarab he was wearing and mortgaged it without hesitation. The two met every day, and Li Bai became famous in one fell swoop.

5. Rewrite a 300-word composition in classical Chinese. It was a snowy night. Dr. Xie invited all family members to have a family party in his own house. Everyone sat in front of the hall to study business. Dr. Xie was happy for a while, and I don't know where it came from. He wants to sing poetry and play with the children. Soon, it snowed heavily in front of the door, which inspired Dr. Xie. He said happily, "Snow is falling one after another. What a beautiful scenery! Why don't you tell me what it looks like! " See whose metaphor is more vivid. ""This is wonderful, just to test the children. "The onlookers said in unison that there are still people laughing, maybe they want to see a good show!" I am coming, I am coming! "Someone shouted in the crowd. Who's that? Oh! It turned out to be Xie Lang, the eldest son of Xie Taifu's brother. He pretended to be confident and said loudly, "Snow is falling in the air like salt." "Hey, it doesn't matter. "Look, it turned out to be Xie Daowen, the eye of Xie Yi, the younger brother of Xie Taifu. She smiled and said, "It's better to compare it to catkins flying in the air with the power of the wind. How beautiful! " Master Xie laughed and kept saying, "OK, OK, OK ..." All the brothers and sisters applauded. A talented woman deserves to be a talented woman, and a talented person deserves to be a talented person. Wonderful, wonderful! "The girls all nodded, very satisfied with their performance. The whole family was boiling and really quarreled. The evaluator really wants to distinguish between high and low. Unfortunately, Dr. Xie said, "I'll break up the party today and talk to the government another day." "This is a bit disappointing, but everyone's mood has not been damaged. Everyone went back with the leisure to enjoy the snow. ...

Note: She is the wife of General Zuo and the daughter of Xie Yi.

6. How to write a critical composition is to use two-part allegorical sayings to make up stories with rich associations, delicate language and rich feelings. We can point out the shortcomings of the exercises from the aspects of whether the content is specific, whether the sentences are fluent, whether the feelings are true, whether the center is prominent, whether it is off topic, whether the language is vivid and vivid, and put forward suggestions to encourage students, and the requirements should not be too high. You should look at their exercises with children's eyes! Handwriting A, the notebook is handsome and neat, just like the street in a seaside town, but it can't find any dirt ... It's really comfortable for people to see ... Your handwriting is as beautiful as printed ... I'm ashamed that my handwriting is not as good as yours ... B, whatever, how can it not be like a cat's handwriting ... It's not in the middle of the grid, of course it looks unpleasant ... Just like this ... I don't believe your handwriting is not good. You will write better than me ... Content A, such a rich content, is almost the same as what the writer wrote ... Your exercise is flesh and blood, and reading is really a great enjoyment ... Your composition is very specific, and I enjoy reading it ... You must love it very much at ordinary times. It's tasteless at all. It's delicious with more kind words ... It's not as good as Vivienne Liu's words (or the names of other poor students). Don't you feel a little embarrassed ... Your composition is like a 90-year-old woman's mouth, dry and empty, and her words are leaking straight ... Sentence A, fluent and vivid sentences, like Lushan Waterfall, flowing downstream and flowing smoothly ... This metaphor is very appropriate. Explain that you have been carefully observing ... how did you come up with such a clever anthropomorphic sentence ... How appropriate this rhetorical question is to be used here ... This exclamatory sentence expresses your true feelings at that time ... The ancient poems are quoted just right, and I will use the poems I have learned in my composition in the future ... The magical use of the two-part allegorical saying makes my stomach ache with laughter ... B. The composition is uneven and uncomfortable to read. It's like falling down easily if you're not careful ... The sentence seems to be cut off and incomplete ... If you read it carefully after writing, you will find the impassability ... Don't be afraid of trouble, all the good articles have been changed ... You can't always expect others to help you correct them, but learn to correct every sentence yourself ... The levels of A and sections are very clear ... These parts are properly divided ... Each section has a meaning. The paragraphs are also very clear ... I feel breathless when I read them ... There are too few sections to add ... The middle part can be divided into several parts ... The first section and the second section should not be separated, but should be merged ... This section cannot be related to the contents of the above sections ... It is detailed and focused ... The key parts are well written ... This event is clearly described in the tour order ... Part X is too wordy ... I can't see the point of this composition ... It's not important ... It should be written simply ... Topic A is fresh, like bamboo shoots in spring, tender and crisp ... The topic is very interesting, and people can't help but want to see it ... Tell me, where did you come up with such a good topic ... This topic is not common with punctuation marks (ellipsis) ... I like you very much. People are not interested in reading your composition ... Everyone can think of such a topic, which is too general ... The content seems to be inconsistent with the title ... It is more appropriate to use your head and change the topic ... I think it is better to call it "better" ... Punctuation ... I can see that you are a conscientious person ... Punctuation is very accurate ... B, the content is wonderful and the punctuation is sloppy, and people don't want to read your composition .. You can't type in the grid ...-This article is much more written than the last one. Go on ... be more specific and vivid, and you will hopefully become a member of the composition team ... read more books, observe carefully and think hard, and your work will be published in newspapers soon ... Ding Yishan and Lou Wei are not prodigies. They can do it, and I believe you can do it, and they will perform better than them ... Are you still afraid that your writing level will not go up ... I insist on treating it as a document every night, and that's how I master a lot of good words ... Nothing is difficult in the world, and I'm afraid there are more words in your homework now than before, which is the result of your careful diary ... Don't you want to be a music star? Practice a pair of "thief eyes" ... congratulations on reading your composition in public in class last time. Try to write better next time, ok? ..... Don't always worry that you are more stupid than others, as long as you follow Mr. Qin's request, your dream will come true sooner or later ... You can't always write anything, because you pay too little sweat ... Lending the diary and composition of the composition group to read more will be of great help to you ... Inspiration never likes to visit lazy people ... Diligence and diligence will make your name appear in the newspaper and make you feel bitter.